WHAT do YOU think OF my BOOK?

You have some very good descriptions; but just make sure that you SHOW the reader, not TELL. It may be difficult to learn this process, but if you practice making scenes more vivid, then the reader can place themselves there and experiencing what the character is. Also, make sure you indent your paragraphs, (I know this is just on Yahoo, but just in case, I thought I'd at it). Also, keep up with spelling and grammar errors. They are sometimes sneaky and hard to see, so re-reading your work over and over again, you will be sure to catch them. As always, keep up with your writing and good luck on your story. :)